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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 14:52, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:52, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
- "due to the fact that" → "because" (less wordy)
- Remove the comma after "Nexus of All Realities connection".
- "Cumberbatch was removed from the series entirely" – was there a reason?
- "lifted up" – both words mean the same thing so consider removing "up".
- Lola VFX is linked twice in #Visual_effects.
- Entertainment Weekly is also linked twice in the article.
- Is the tracklisting necessary? The only notable song is already mentioned in prose.
- "resembles modern day" → "resembles the modern day"
- "a 87% approval rating" → "an 87% approval rating"
- Again, avoid having too many quotes and add more reviews (WP:RECEPTION).
- "affects" – typo for "effects"?
- "final two episode" → "final two episodes"
- Remove the hyphen between "theme-song".
- Remove the comma after "Bowen herself praised the episode".
- Ping when done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 03:51, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- I have addressed all the small issues. I don't think there is as much need for expanding the reception section but I will take a look at it soon. We should definitely have the tracklisting, like the other episode articles the music section here is a doubling as an album section because there is no way we should have a separate article for this album. - adamstom97 (talk) 04:59, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- I agree regarding the track listing existing here because there is more music to the episode beside "Agatha All Along". We touch on a few points necessary for a reader here regarding Agatha All Along, while also discussing the other theme and info from Beck. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 17:59, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- I have addressed all the small issues. I don't think there is as much need for expanding the reception section but I will take a look at it soon. We should definitely have the tracklisting, like the other episode articles the music section here is a doubling as an album section because there is no way we should have a separate article for this album. - adamstom97 (talk) 04:59, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
I don't think there is as much need for expanding the reception section.
The second, third, and fourth paragraphs include only two reviews each. There are twenty-three on Rotten Tomatoes. The issue is that there is an overabundance of quotes instead of more reviews. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 02:17, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
- @Some Dude From North Carolina: I have made some reception updates now. I still think we had good coverage of the critical opinions on the episode, but I have added a little bit extra. Mostly just rewriting the existing reviews to try address your concerns. - adamstom97 (talk) 01:23, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
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