Wikipedia:WikiProject India/Peer review/Bhavnagar

Bhavnagar

Requesting peer review as the article is in somewhat stable state now and can be improved further with your suggestions. -- Square (talk) 20:42, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Kensplanet

• Lead
• Please link 1723 AD properly.
• It is the sixth-largest city of Gujarat, and the third-largest city in the Saurashtra region. Bhavnagar is also known as the cultural capital of Saurashtra.
  It's good to provide references for these sentences. Not compulsory. Just a suggestion.
• Please expand the Lead. It's too short. Include a sentence from Economy, Culture and other such sections.

• Infobox
• Please link 53.3km properly in the Infobox.

• History
• Early History
• This article need not bother about Surya Vanshi clan. So remove the corresponding red link.
• I can see a lot of red links in the article. Red links should be only for those articles which are crucial and very much related to the city. Most of your red links are not related. Create the article and then wikilink it.
• Do create a article on Bhanvsinhji Gohil, since the city is named after him. Such articles should be red linked.
• Similarly, for Vakhatsinji Gohil
• State of Bhavnagar
• I don't beleive this. This is an article on Bhavnagar city, and you have written such a huge section on "State of Bhavnagar", when an article on the state exists. So much state details are not at all required. Please remove.
• Merger with the Indian Union in 1947
• Again, "Merger with the Indian Union in 1947" is related to Bhavnagar state, not Bhavnagar city. These details are not required and are trivial.
• The entire History section will have to be re-written, keeping in mind that this is an article on the city not the state.

• Geography and climate
• Geography and Climate-->>Geography and climate
• Topography
• All these sentences require references.
  --It has an average elevation of 24 metres (78 feet).
  --It occupies area of 53.30 km².
  --General slope dips in the northeasterly direction at the apex of Gulf of Khambhat.
  --Small non-perennial river named Kansara Nala passes through outer area of the city.
• Climate
• Please wikilink atleast a few words. Without wikilinks, the text looks dry.
• Each and every sentence which you have mentioned here should have a reference.
• Geology
• Avoid redlinks to articles, not related to the city.
• Too. much of earthquake details.
• Include details such as hills, valleys, soil, beaches (if any), rocks etc..
• Culture and arts
• Culture and Arts-->>.Culture and arts
• Bhavnagar is considered a city of education and culture---Nothing unique. Almost all cities are considered as cities of education and culture. Remove this.
• People of Bhavnagar are considered to be easy-going, and art-loving.---massive POV problem. Remove immediately.
• Please do not have so many paragraphs. Prefer merging similar data.
• I will categorize data on notable personalities as trivia. The reason behind this is Bhavnagar is a huge city. There is so much data which is available on the Net, that you do not require such data. It's ok for very small cities having population in just thousands to have such data. But not for Bhavnagar. I suggest you to remove all these details and move it some other article, entirely dedicated to "Notable people from Bhavnagar".
• Moreover, even the names have not been wikilinked properly.
• City Planning and Architecture
• I still am not able to understand this section.
• Details on Takhteshwar Temple, Gangajalia, Nilambag Palace, Town Hall should go under Culture or Tourism.
• Barton library can either go in Culture or Education.
• Details on Krishnanagar area should go in History if its important. But however that appears to be unnecessary details (trivia).

• Education

Bhavnagar is known for pioneering and laudable efforts in the fields of rural child as well as liberal women's education.--POV, exaggerations, please remove

• Red link problems
• Your second paragraph lacks references. Please provide some
• "Institutes of higher education" and "famous educational institutions", should be writen in paragraph form and not in bullet form. Please write ti in paragraph form.
• Some compulsory details you must include are medium of education in schools, colleges, institutions, Board of education in schools like Gujarat board, ICSE, CBSE etc...

• Economy
• No references at all.
• No Images.
• Bullets need to be avoided.
• Diamond details are repeated twice.

• Demographics
• More details like migrant status, HIV status, sex workers, slum status, way of living need to be incorporated.

• Tourism
• Please merge this section with Culture since it barely has any details.

• Transportation
• Transportation and tourism are not at all related dear.
• By the way, it should be Transport (UK English). not Transportation.
• No References
• No Images.
• Where are Train details, Tram details etc..

• Points of Interest
• Should be under culture.
• No Bullets allowed please.

• Ports
• Should be under Transport.

• Sister city
• Reference required.

• Other details
• Central Salt and Marine Chemical Research Institute should go in Education.
• Bhavnagar state details not required.
• Bhavnagri Ganthia should go under Culture#Cuisine.

• References
• Wikipedia article can never be treated as reliable sources.
• Why red links here too.?
• With just 12 References, this article will nver be able to attain either GA or FA status.

• External links
• Please Include links which give complete details on the entire city.
• Educational Institutes and History should be removed. Create a Further reading section and put these details there not here.

Thankyou, Kensplanet^Talk_E-mail^{Contributions}

-- Thanks Kenneth. That was an extensive review. I will take a look at all the suggestions and try to carry out as much as possible. Square (talk) 04:46, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]