Wikipedia:WikiProject India/Peer review/2008

Please put newer requests at the top.

Vithoba

I soon aim to nominate GA Vithoba for FAC. I would like suggestions to improve the article to FA status. Also, i request some copyeditor to go through the article to polish the language, if needed.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 12:13, 6 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Vitthala(Sanskrit --> Space needed

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

First sentence is long. Split

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Vithoba is the main focus of the monotheistic non-Brahminical Varkari sect --> Could you clarify it? "focus"?

focus in the sense "A center of interest or activity"--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

generally considered --> peacock term/weasel term. WP:AWT

Most authors like Monier Williams Sanskrit-English Dictionary and religious leaders associate Vithoba with Vishnu or Krishna (a Vaishnava deity) but few groups relate him with Shiva and Buddha. So "generally considered" is used.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Pandharpur, Maharashtra. --> Pandharpur in Maharashtra.

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Aratis --> lower case

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hastings too supports, Khare suggests "Vitthala -- > who are these people. Mention the designations/authority. eg Historian Hastings etc (global comment)

All of them are authors or religious scholars for sure, historian? one may or may not know. Adding "scholar XYZ" before every name may make the text repetitive. Even FA Ganesha uses "Martin-Dubost says..", "Krishan notes that..", "Paul Courtright says that...", "..as Robert Brown explains.."--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

epithet of Rudra-Shiva. --> context needed. What is Rudra Shiva? expand the sentence.

god added.

"Pandurang Stotra -> do not use an external link in text. (even it is in another wikipedia)

removed.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Adi Shankaracharya --> context needed

"hymn "Pandurang Stotra" by Adi Shankaracharya, if genuine, establishes that Vithoba worship existed as early as 9th century AD, the period of its author." context as author of Pandurang Stotra

"The Cult of Vithoba" --> while not incorrect, title names should be ideally italicised instead of using quotes.

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

chief temple at Pandharpur. --> was this the first known temple?

Yes. Clarified. --Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

often disputed --> by whom?

By scholars. "The historicity of Pundalik is often disputed. While some scholars believe him to be a historical figure, others dismiss him as a mythical figure." Sentence reworded.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

some scholars --> again another weasel term. Do a global check

Sentence reworded.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Varkaris do not merely consider --> rewrite litote into positive tone

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Dhangars --> context

"Vithoba ... worshipped first as Dhangar (a shepherd, cowherd community) deity." and the Shiva connection.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Dr. Ambedkar, --> BR Ambedkar

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Buddhist convert --> is 'convert' necessary?

To establish context with Buddha. fact is he was a Hindu converted to Buddhist.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

( Hindu --> remove space

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Sect: Varkari Panth --> Odd title

renamed "Varkari sect".--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Historicity of --> Remove from title

Nice suggestion. Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A map of the main temple would be a good addition

I do not have a such PD image, though if anyone is interested to create one, i can provide a source.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:19, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Remove bullets under =Temples=

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"...temples in towns like..." --> like ->> such as

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Kartik shukla eleventh --> not helpful to a global reader

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

24 ekadashis --> context

Ekadashis as noted are sacred days for Vithoba.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:50, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The main temple of Vithoba and his consort Rakhumai --> unlink

Linked to only main temple. Link provided only in the beginning.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The article has too many terms for a person not familiar about the topic to read. Context should be provided so that the user does not have to click on every non English term in the sentence.

I have tried to provide the meanings in brackets as much as possible. If certain sentences are pointed out, i can work on it.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:19, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Balance the images. Too many clustered up in certain sections

Changed placement of imgs.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Origins and development --> Development???
11th --> superscript not needed

Doing--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Legend needs a copyedit
The main temple can also have the coordinates supplied.

Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

=Nichalp «Talk»= 16:35, 6 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. Working on it.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Mangalore

This article has been drastically improved and meets most of the standards of Wikipedia. A peer review is required on this article. All are requested to participate.-->>Kensplanet (talk) 07:13, 6 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have gone thru the article:-

The economy para has lots of nonsense. plz remove nonsense. write a economy in mangalore article and put all details there. here keep only key details.....write only a single para
similarly for civic admin
put lang & rel in demography and merge cuisine with culture
transport is too big . plz reduce. write a whole section without subdiivisions/ only key points. write a article transport in mlr and put all details thereWpinman (talk) 14:22, 17 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Editors

I have gone thru the article:-

~~The economy para has lots of nonsense. plz remove nonsense. write a economy in mangalore article and put all details there. here keep only key details.....write only a single para~~
Done. Economy section reduced. Main article has been put up there.-------Kensplanet (talk) 14:27, 18 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
~~similarly for civic admin~~

-Done. Trivia from this section deleted.-------Kensplanet (talk) 14:27, 18 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

~~put lang & rel in demography and merge cuisine with culture~~
Comment. No, Language and Religion cannot be put under Demographics. Demographics is reserves for only those points for which numbers (figures) can be provided. But Cuisine will be merged with Culture.-------Kensplanet (talk) 14:55, 17 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]
~~transport is too big . plz reduce. write a whole section without subdiivisions/ only key points. write a article transport in mlr and put all details there~~
Done. Innecessary info deleted-------Kensplanet (talk) 14:27, 18 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Wpinman (talk) 14:22, 17 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Rajkot

I have nominated Rajkot Article for peer review because I feel that I have made significant changes in this article and I like to collect review to improve quality of this article. Ultimate goal is to nominate this article in FA category. Jadia Gaurang Pravinbhai 07:10, 22 December 2007 (UTC)

Kensplanet

Lead In

Rajkot is the 28th urban agglomeration in India, with a population more than 1.43 million as on 2008

I recommend removing this sentence. If Rajkot is the 2nd urban agglomeration in India, then do mention it. Morever, "Rajkot is the 28th urban agglomeration in India" is meaningless

The Lead In is too. short. It doesn't summarize the key aspects of the city. Think of some key aspects and rewrite this section.
I suggest you to refer the Mumbai Lead In. Although the city has a lot of things to be proud of, but only the key points are mentioned.

History

Wikipedia:WikiProject Indian cities#History clearly states Do not use subheadings. There is no hard and fast rule that you must follow it. But the History section has too. many sub-sections and there is hardly any data in it. Just a meagre 1 or 2 sentences. Please do not use sub-headings. Only a full-fledged section is enough.
I suggest you to refer the Bangalore Article for this section.

Geography and climate

This section looks fine. Appropriate formatting willl do. The Climate sub-section is not at all Wiki-linked. Please wiki-link it. Try to wiki-link some terms.
Refer the Chennai article for Geography and climate.

Demographics

This will require some work. I am sure you can collect more data such as density, migrants, slum population, ethnic groups, religions from the Net.
Delhi has a very good Demographic section written. Please refer it.

Culture

I am sorry but Culture is a total mess. It doesn't have even a single Image. Culture section has to be the best in each and every city article. You will have to forge it somehow.
Please support the section with Images
Mumbai has a beautiful section on Culture. I advise you to refer there.

Economy

This section really needs copy editing for grammar, style, cohesion, tone or spelling. You are never supposed to list Industries. You have to maintain a paragraph. Data within this section looks fine. But proper formatting and grammar is required.
Support the section with Images.
I suggest you to refer the Kochi Article for this section.

Law and government

This section is not fine. Try to keep the table at the extreme left.
Citizens can now get all their complaints registered with the Rajkot Municipal Corporation by dialling a single number with an assurance that the problem would be addressed within 72 hours--->>> Is this some sort of an advetisement. Please remove this.
In recent time, The most disturbing crime trend, however, has been an increasing number of incidents of parents murdering their children. Local government and state government are tediously working to reduce crime rate in city.-->>>Please use references. I really don't beleive this.
Support the section with Images.
Mumbai has a very well written Civic administration section which has details on courts, police, fire brigades, etc.

Education

Details are insufficient.
Where is the language or medium of Instruction details, CBSE or Gujarat or ICSE Board details, government or private run college details.
Support the section with Images.
Refer Chennai for this section.

Transport

Details are again insufficient.
Come on, it is very easy to chuck out details from the NET regarding Transport.
Support the section with Images
Delhi has a very good Transport section. Maybe you can improve your article by referring that article.

Sister cities

Fine
If Rajkot has only 1 Sister city, the I recommend renaming Sister cities to Sister city.

References

Fine for now. As you go on improving the Article, References will increase. Avoid any mistakes here. Currently, I can see Media:http://rajkotcityguide.com which is not referenced properly.

External links

Avoid so many Links.
Keep only the key vital links which give details on the city as a whole.
Do not include links which just focuses on Industries, but doesn't focus on other aspects of the city like History, Geography etc...

Other

Other items like Categories, Templates are fine.

Hope this review helps the Article.
Any doubts, please contact me. May this Article become a FA soon---->>>>>Kensplanet (talk) 14:18, 15 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hindu-German Conspiracy

I think this a pretty comprehensive article based on the most reliable and comprehensive sources I could think of. I need feedback on wether the article is NPOV, NOR and general quality, since I am thinking of listing this for FA soon.Rueben lys (talk) 17:02, 23 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Kensplanet

This is a Great Article. Deserves to be a FA. I am giving some suggestion.
Whether to implement or not depends on you editors.

Lead

The conspirators included Indian Nationalists in India, the United States and Germany,(Who were the conspirators in the US and Germany; like you have mentioned Indian Nationalists in India) with the help of the Irish Republicans and the German Foreign Office.

You havent included any details of Middle-East in the Lead. A short sentence will do.

Background

In the aftermath of the assassination, the India House was rapidly suppressed.(Rapidly suppressed by whom; The British Govt. or the British Army; good if you mention it)

The economic scenario in India in the early 1900s was depressing and this led to large scale immigration of Punjabis to Australia, the United States and Canada. The Canadian government decided to curtail this influx with a series of legislations, which were aimed at limiting the entry of South Asians into the country and restricting the political rights of those already in the country. Though the Punjabi community had been an important loyal force for the British Empire, legislations like these led to discontent and protests within the community. Faced with increasingly difficult situations, the community began organising itself into political groups. A large number of Punjabis also moved to the United States, but they encountered similar political and social problems.
I didn't understand this Para. If the The Canadian government decided to curtail the influx of Punjabis, how does this contribute to the Conspiracy. Because you have mentioned the conspiracy was aimed basically at the British, not the Canadians and Americans. Due to discrimination, if they form political groups, they are basically revolting against Americans and Canadians. Where are the British here? Please clarify

Ghadar Party

Ghadar meetings were held in Los Angeles, Oxford, Vienna, Washington, and Shanghai.(Why not link Shangai if link all other cities)

Indian revolutionary underground

The Indian revolutionary underground gathered momentum during the first decade of the 1900s, with groups arising in Maharashtra, Bengal, Orissa, Bihar, Uttar Pradesh, Punjab and Madras Presidency.
Did Maharashtra exist during that time. Wasn't it Bombay Presidency since you have mentioned Madras Presidency also

~~More groups were scattered around India.~~
Is this sentence reqd. You have already included almost the entire India

Irish involvement

Irish collaboration with the Ghadarite plans and efforts pre-dated World War I by at least six years.
Could you mention the exact date. Since you have nowhere mentioned the date of WWI.

The conspiracy, during its planning stages, garnered major support from a network formed by the Ghadarites (Which Network was this?), the Irish and the Irish-American reporters and newspapers.

Irish Americans were involved in the early but failed attempts to smuggle arms into India, including a failed attempt on-board the SS Moraitis. (Please provide context to SS Moraitis since there is no wikilink to it)

Germany and the Berlin Committee

Har Dayal had been arrested in the United States in 1914, but he had jumped bail and made his way to Switzerland, leaving the party and publications in the charge of Ram Chandra Bharadwaj. Contact was established with Har Dayal in Switzerland and he was convicned (convinced) of the feasibility of the project.

Please provide more context to persons.

The German Chancellor Theobald von Bethmann Hollweg authorised German activity against India as World War I broke out in September 1914, and Germany decided to actively support the Ghadarite plans.

The German effort was headed by prominent archaeologist and historian Max von Oppenheim, who was also the head of the newly formed Intelligence Bureau for the east.

But there's no context for Roger Casement, Ram Chandra Bharadwaj and Jatin Mukherjee. Mention atleast whether they were political leaders, historians, rebels, etc...

Conspiracy

~~Consequently, a reduced force, estimated to have been as low~~ as 15,000 troops in late 1914, was stationed in India.(Why do you call 15K low. Some may consider it as very very high. POV problem. Just leave it at 15K)

Singh's (Should it be Singh) reported that the situation in India was favourable for a revolution

A number of Ghadar leaders, like Barkatullah and Taraknath Das, used the inflammatory passions surrounding the Komagata Maru (repeated wikilinks) event as a rallying point and successfully brought many disaffected Indians in North America into the party's fold.

East Asia

While the former resource was in plentiful supply (While men were in plentiful) with more and more Indians coming forward to join the Ghadarite cause, obtaining arms for the uprising proved to be more difficult.

Tarak Nath Das (please provide context for him) urged Japan~~ese~~ to align with Germany, on the grounds that American's war preparation could actually be directed against Japan.

Later, in 1915, Abani Mukherjee (please provide context for him) is also known to have tried unsuccessfully to arrange for arms from Japan.

The Ascendancy of Li Yuanhong to Chinese Presidency in 1916, led to the negotiations reopening through his former private secretary (name of this secretary) who resided in the United States at the time.

United States

The Hindu German Conspiracy Trial opened in 1917 in the United States on charges of gun running and at the time was one of the lengthiest and most expensive trials in American legal history.
I tnink this requires a reference.

Although blamed solely on German agents at the time ,(there should be no space before comma) later investigations by the Directorate of Naval Intelligence in the aftermath of the Annie Larsen incident unearthed links between the Black Tom explosion and Franz von Papen, the Irish movement, the Indian movement as well as Communist elements active in the United States.

February 1945

In India, unaware of the delayed shipment and confident of being able to rally the Indian sepoy, the plot for the mutiny took its final shape. Under the plans, the 23rd Cavalry in Punjab was to seize weapons and kill their officers while on roll call on 21 February (21 February shouldn't be linked)

However, Punjab CID successfully infiltrated the conspiracy at the last moment through one Kirpal Singh (Who is this Kirpal Singh; provide context)

Plans for revolt by the 130th Baluchi Regiment at Rangoon on 21 January (21 January shouldn't be linked) were thwarted.

Rash Behari Bose escaped from Lahore and in May 1915 fled to Japan. Other leaders, including Giani Pritam Singh, Swami Satyananda Puri and others fled to Thailand or other ~~sympathetic~~ (POV Problem) nations.

On February 15 (21 February shouldn't be linked), the 5th Light Infantry stationed at Singapore was among the few units to mutiny successfully.

Bagha Jatin

In April 1915, unaware of the failure of the Annie Larsen plan, Papen arranged through Hans Tauscher (no context for this man) a second shipment of arms, consisting of 7,300 Springfield rifles, 1,930 pistols, 10 Gatling guns and nearly 3,000,000 cartridges

From the coast of the Bay of Bengal (needs to be wikilinked), these would be collected by Jatin's group. Jatin estimated that he would be able to win over the 14th Rajput Regiment in Calcutta and cut the line to Madras at Balasore and thus take control of Bengal.

Southeast Asia

Herambalal Gupta and the German consul at Chicago arranged to have German operatives George Paul Boehm, Henry Schult, and Albert Wehde sent to Siam through Manila with the ~~express~~ (exaggeration) purpose of training the Indians.

The Germans, while in Manila, also attempted to transfer the arms cargo of two German ships, the Sachsen and the Suevia, to Siam in a schooner.(, right) seeking refuge at Manila harbour.

The plan was proposed by Vincent Kraft(,) a German planter in Batavia(,) who had been wounded fighting in France.

I recommend you to check commas, fullstops and these minor things throughout the article.

Afghanistan and the Middle East

~~At the time that~~ (When) World War I began(,) Ubaidullah Sindhi proceeded to Kabul to establish contact with the Amir Habibullah of Afghanistan

I recommend you to shorten the prose as much as possible.

The mission was headed by Oskar von Niedermayer (Context missing) and included Werner Otto von Hentig, the German diplomatic representative to Kabul, as well as Barkatullah and other prominent nationalists from the Berlin Committee.

During it('s) journey through Persia, the expedition established contacts with the tribes of the Indo-Iranian border and encouraged them to strike against British interests.

Please go through the article a few more times and fix these silly minor issues.

Culmination

AtSolan,(Space between At & Solan') Private James Daly led about 70 Rangers in mutiny and tried to storm the armoury, which the loyal guard successfully defended.

I didn't find any major pproblem anywhere else except commas and minor mistakes. They can be fixed by going through the article again and again. It can easily attain FA status once these issues are resolved.Thankyou, Kensplanet^Talk_E-mail^{Contributions}

Reply to Comments

Thanks for your very helpful comments. I have implemented all that you have suggested, save for the name of Li YuanHong's secretary's name, since I cant find this. More comments would be very welcome. rueben_lys (talk · contribs) 22:55, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Little India (magazine)

I think that a good peer review will help us improve this article a good bit. Arundhati lejeune 08:53, 13 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Mspraveen

Now that it is of a stub class, it means that it is a real article. However, it would need a lot of work to be done on the breadth of the article. Good checklists to use for the article are WP:WIAFA and WP:WIAGA. A key to remember is that the articles on Wikipedia (it being an encyclopedia) should assume a neutral point of view and ample referencing is encouraged for the veracity of the article.

The article, in specific, needs a proper structure like the lead section, its origins (history), the style of the magazine (features right from the editorial to the choice of articles within it), any awards that it won, any special notable features of the magazine, any special/notable columnists and so on. Maybe, an article that classifies as a publication is The Economist.

To further develop your article, you may use the article development guide. Good luck! If you have any further questions, please revert to me on my talk page. —Preceding signed but undated comment was added at 06:35, 14 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

RegentsPark

Do note also that, the way the article is currently written, it could easily be deleted for lack of notability (see WP:N). You need to show that the publication is notable and you can do that by fixing your citations. For example, the first sentence needs a Reliable Source to back up the claim of largest circulating publication. Later in the article, there is a reference to www.bpaww.com, the actual page (with access date) should be included as a link in the article. The same applies to the two awards mentioned in the article as well as to the claim in the last sentence (any reasonable source will do for a 'believed' type of statement). --RegentsPark (talk) 21:08, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Arutprakasa Vallalar Chidambaram Ramalinga Swamigal

This important article in general requires an indepth Peer review. Though this article was not started by me, I had done major edits (re-construction) recently. --Logic riches (talk) 17:46, 13 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Kensplanet

Lead

He is commonly known in India and across the world as Vallalar (Tamil: வள்ளலார்).
Here The name in Tamil Script is unnecessary. It serves no purpose on an English Wikipedia.

According to Suddha Sanmarga, the prime aspects of human life should be love connected with charity and divine practice leading to achievement of pure knowledge.
Details on Suddha Sanmarga not required in the Lead. Move it somewhere in the main prose.

Prefer splitting the Lead.

Infobox

Does the Image:Vallalar.jpg satisfy the Non-free / fair use media rationale properly?

Early Life

Wikilink to Pillai is no way related to Ramiah Pillai. Please take care.

By a quirk of fate Ramayyah Pillai's first five wives had died childless and in quick succession.
You need not mention quirk of fate. Just mention Ramayyah Pillai's first five wives had died childless and in quick succession.

Notable happening during childhood

When Ramalingam was five years old, Sabhapati, decided to formally educate his youngest sibling Ramalingam but the young child however showed a deep disinclination towards formal education but on the otherhand preferring trips to the local Kandasamy temple.
The Kandasmy temple is linked with the List of Hindu temples. They don't have any relation.

The first reward came in the form of a vision of Lord Muruga
Please avoid bolding anything. If you want to make anything distinct, italicize it.

His elder brother Sabhapati was a learned scholar and upanyasaka (one who tells religious stories).
It's a good practice to italicize things for which you provide english explanation. In this case, upanyasaka.

It so happened that once Ramalingam had to substitute for his brother at an upanyasam session.
What's the difference between an upanyasam and upanyasaka. Because, both wikilink to the same page.

His brilliant exposition and uninterrupted flow of words while enunciating a verse from the `Periyapuranam' by Shaivism an epic poem by Sekkizhar narrating the episodes connected with the 63 Nayanars amazed the onlookers.
Words like brilliant are exaggerations.

Later his brother also graciously acknowledged the mental and spiritual superiority of his brother.
Again, graciously is exaggeration.

His teachings

- One of the primary teaching of valallar is "Service to mankind is path of moksha".
Avoid bold, italicize instead.

Around 1870 he established the Sathaya Gyana Sabai, hall of True Wisdom Forum and ensuring it was entirely secular .
Shouldn't the hall of True Wisdom be in parantheses.

I think there is a bit trivia although I am not sure.

Chennai Kandha kottam

The temple description have absolutely no relation with Arutprakasa Vallalar Chidambaram Ramalinga Swamigal. I suggest you remove these unnecessary trivial details.

Ramalinga Swamigal's Literary works

Avoid bullets and write it in paragraph form.

Songs

Again, Avoid bullets and write it in paragraph form.

Bhavnagar

Requesting peer review as the article is in somewhat stable state now and can be improved further with your suggestions. -- Square (talk) 20:42, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Kensplanet

Lead
Please link 1723 AD properly.
It is the sixth-largest city of Gujarat, and the third-largest city in the Saurashtra region. Bhavnagar is also known as the cultural capital of Saurashtra.
It's good to provide references for these sentences. Not compulsory. Just a suggestion.
Please expand the Lead. It's too short. Include a sentence from Economy, Culture and other such sections.

Infobox
Please link 53.3km properly in the Infobox.

History
Early History
This article need not bother about Surya Vanshi clan. So remove the corresponding red link.
I can see a lot of red links in the article. Red links should be only for those articles which are crucial and very much related to the city. Most of your red links are not related. Create the article and then wikilink it.
Do create a article on Bhanvsinhji Gohil, since the city is named after him. Such articles should be red linked.
Similarly, for Vakhatsinji Gohil
State of Bhavnagar
I don't beleive this. This is an article on Bhavnagar city, and you have written such a huge section on "State of Bhavnagar", when an article on the state exists. So much state details are not at all required. Please remove.
Merger with the Indian Union in 1947
Again, "Merger with the Indian Union in 1947" is related to Bhavnagar state, not Bhavnagar city. These details are not required and are trivial.
The entire History section will have to be re-written, keeping in mind that this is an article on the city not the state.

Geography and climate
Geography and Climate-->>Geography and climate
Topography
All these sentences require references.
--It has an average elevation of 24 metres (78 feet).
--It occupies area of 53.30 km².
--General slope dips in the northeasterly direction at the apex of Gulf of Khambhat.
--Small non-perennial river named Kansara Nala passes through outer area of the city.
Climate
Please wikilink atleast a few words. Without wikilinks, the text looks dry.
Each and every sentence which you have mentioned here should have a reference.
Geology
Avoid redlinks to articles, not related to the city.
Too. much of earthquake details.
Include details such as hills, valleys, soil, beaches (if any), rocks etc..
Culture and arts
Culture and Arts-->>.Culture and arts
Bhavnagar is considered a city of education and culture---Nothing unique. Almost all cities are considered as cities of education and culture. Remove this.
People of Bhavnagar are considered to be easy-going, and art-loving.---massive POV problem. Remove immediately.
Please do not have so many paragraphs. Prefer merging similar data.
I will categorize data on notable personalities as trivia. The reason behind this is Bhavnagar is a huge city. There is so much data which is available on the Net, that you do not require such data. It's ok for very small cities having population in just thousands to have such data. But not for Bhavnagar. I suggest you to remove all these details and move it some other article, entirely dedicated to "Notable people from Bhavnagar".
Moreover, even the names have not been wikilinked properly.
City Planning and Architecture
I still am not able to understand this section.
Details on Takhteshwar Temple, Gangajalia, Nilambag Palace, Town Hall should go under Culture or Tourism.
Barton library can either go in Culture or Education.
Details on Krishnanagar area should go in History if its important. But however that appears to be unnecessary details (trivia).

Education

Bhavnagar is known for pioneering and laudable efforts in the fields of rural child as well as liberal women's education.--POV, exaggerations, please remove

Red link problems
Your second paragraph lacks references. Please provide some
"Institutes of higher education" and "famous educational institutions", should be writen in paragraph form and not in bullet form. Please write ti in paragraph form.
Some compulsory details you must include are medium of education in schools, colleges, institutions, Board of education in schools like Gujarat board, ICSE, CBSE etc...

Economy
No references at all.
No Images.
Bullets need to be avoided.
Diamond details are repeated twice.

Demographics
More details like migrant status, HIV status, sex workers, slum status, way of living need to be incorporated.

Tourism
Please merge this section with Culture since it barely has any details.

Transportation
Transportation and tourism are not at all related dear.
By the way, it should be Transport (UK English). not Transportation.
No References
No Images.
Where are Train details, Tram details etc..

Points of Interest
Should be under culture.
No Bullets allowed please.

Ports
Should be under Transport.

Sister city
Reference required.

Other details
Central Salt and Marine Chemical Research Institute should go in Education.
Bhavnagar state details not required.
Bhavnagri Ganthia should go under Culture#Cuisine.

References
Wikipedia article can never be treated as reliable sources.
Why red links here too.?
With just 12 References, this article will nver be able to attain either GA or FA status.

External links
Please Include links which give complete details on the entire city.
Educational Institutes and History should be removed. Create a Further reading section and put these details there not here.

Thankyou, Kensplanet^Talk_E-mail^{Contributions}

-- Thanks Kenneth. That was an extensive review. I will take a look at all the suggestions and try to carry out as much as possible. Square (talk) 04:46, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Sri Venkateswara College of Engineering

I have nominated this article for a peer review,to find improvement areas before it undergoes quality assessment. - Amog |^Talk 14:18, 5 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

RegentsPark

To be perfectly honest, the article reads like an official document (excluding, of course, the controversies section). Typically, you want a well-written piece that minimizes information that most readers will not be interested in. For example, consider the 'History' section which can be compressed into a couple of sentences. Someone needs to go through the article and add whitespaces after commas.

Lead

Looks ok. Perhaps you can add a line relating to the controversies here to make it interesting. Perhaps not.

History

Too much detail. And, what is a grihapravesam? I assume that not much has happened in the way of exciting stuff (good news for a college!) so there is not much to say here but surely the college must have grown in number of students, degrees granted, areas of instruction, etc. Perhaps that should be featured in the history section.

Milestones

These aren't really milestones. The first para (SIPC stuff) should go into a section on 'Management and administration' since apparently SIPC owns the college. In that section, you should include any information about a board of directors, how they are selected, etc. You also need to include information about finances (is the college self-sufficient, does tuition cover all expenses, if not, where does the rest of the money come from? Is there an endowment?)

The second part of the milestones section should go into a section on alumni.

The BT in info tech should go into 'History'.

Library

Probably should go into a section labeled Facilities.

The Forum

Should probably go into a section on Academics. That's where you want to put areas of instruction (departments), special academic programs, etc.

Other stuff

You need to talk about admissions in a way that makes the controversy described in the article clear. It is not clear to someone like me (who knows nothing about admission to Chennai colleges) what the implications of the controversy are and how the controversy links to the way in which students are admitted.

Hostel

I suggest rewriting this under the title 'Student life' and including information about clubs, activities (festivals?) etc. Think about what someone from a rival college would like to know about student life at SVC.

Scholarships and Honors

Should go in academics as a sub-section. Honors, as a section, typically relates to honors that the college and its members receive from outside. --RegentsPark (talk) 18:58, 5 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

National Institute of Technology, Srinagar

I have nominated this article for peer review because I feel that this article can be further improved in terms of its quality as well as its quantity. Any piece of advice would of great help.
Rohit Reddy™ (talk) 14:46, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

User:RegentsPark

Needs some copyediting. Not a whole lot but I see quite a few articles before proper nouns.

Lead

Lead is too short. I'm not sure what you can say about it - perhaps something about how it compares with its peers (if any) in the region.

History

I guess its ok. A bit bland though. Surely something interesting has happened in the course of its 48 year history? Srinagar is a place where interesting things happen.

The Institute

This section is weak. Lots of peacock words. Example: "The Institute has won recognition as an important National Institute in the field of Technical Education and has been playing a pivotal role in the development of the Kashmir region." If it has won recognition, the form of that recognition should be stated (an award or awards?). If it has played a pivotal role, then the role should be described. To be honest, I don't think you need this section. Some of the material can go into the lead, some into history, and some into facilities.

Facilities

Watch out for words like excellent and well equipped with no descriptions! My opinion, there is too much information. Not much point in listing indoor games, for example. You can better use the space by adding things that are missing (see below).

Missing

There is nothing about academics and courses; nothing about research at the institute; nothing about administration and finances; nothing about student life at the institute; nothing about alumni; and nothing about the elephant in the room (how have the troubles in Kashmir affected the institute). --RegentsPark (talk) 03:14, 3 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Chikkamagaluru District

Adding peer review request from User:Amarrg. -- Ganeshk (talk) 14:41, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kensplanet

Please expand the Lead in. I am sure Chikkamagaluru District has more to offer.
There is a Chickmagalure in the InfoBox section. What is it? I am confused. A foreigner will be totally confused. Please explain.......
Inadequate data on History.
Industries should be a sub-section under Economy. I suggest merging the Industries section with Economy.
Education is totally a mess. Why does the article mention about the institutions in the Technical education section. Best would be a stand-alone Education section. I'll continue-----Kensplanet (talk) 17:22, 2 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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Lead

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