Wikipedia:Peer review/Gibraltar national football team results/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I feel it has the potential to become a feature list. I believe the list entries (matches) are as detailed as possible with notable information and each entry is referenced. The main area I wanted reviewing was the introduction. Prose has never been my strong point but I've tried to include as much detail as possible without it being too long. I would appreciate any feedback and welcome any suggestions for improvement. Also any comment on whether this list has a chance at becoming a featured list.
Thanks, 6ii9 (talk) 14:43, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
Comments from Aza24
6ii9 Many thanks for your work thus far. Sorry that you have not received any responses yet. I will be sure to leave some comments in the next few days. Best - Aza24 (talk) 01:09, 7 January 2021 (UTC)
- I think your list certainly has a chance at becoming a featured list, and there are many prose editors at FLC who can help out
- Okay so the second and third sentences both start with "it" – not ideal; looking at their content, I'm not sure that "which encompasses the countries of Europe" is necessary; how about rephrasing to
It's governing body is the Gibraltar Football Association (GFA) and it competes as a member of the Union of European Football Associations (UEFA).
?- Done: removed the unnecessary content and used the sentence you provided -- 6ii9 (talk) 15:17, 17 January 2021 (UTC)
- would link "friendlies" to Exhibition game
- Done: added links -- 6ii9 (talk) 15:17, 17 January 2021 (UTC)
- The first and second sentences of the second paragraph begin with "Gibraltar" – try to switch up one of these
- Done: reworded the second sentence -- 6ii9 (talk) 15:17, 17 January 2021 (UTC)
- As a non-soccer/football editor I have no idea what "one-nil" means
- Done: Replaced "one-nil" with "1–0" -- 6ii9 (talk) 15:17, 17 January 2021 (UTC)
- The biggest thing I'm concerned about it the color accessibility (see MOS:ACCESS) – for colorblind people why try to include a mark with colors to make it clearer, see the key in DNA and RNA codon tables (which is currently at FLC) for a good example of this.
- Not done: With this one, would symbols definitely be necessary as the score would indicate the match result? -- 6ii9 (talk) 15:39, 17 January 2021 (UTC)
- I see no other major issues; I'll give this a source review if/when it's at FLC and look at the table closer there. Aza24 (talk) 02:28, 17 January 2021 (UTC)
- Thank you -- 6ii9 (talk) 15:39, 17 January 2021 (UTC)