Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/John F. Bolt/archive2

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by GrahamColm 10:18, 18 January 2013 [1].

John F. Bolt

Nominator(s): —Ed!^(talk) 20:10, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article. It has passed a GA nomination and a WP:MILHIST A-class review. The previous FAC happened earlier this fall and lapsed with no significant reviewers. —Ed!^(talk) 20:10, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

So far so good on prose, apart from repeating Bolt's name too often, per standard disclaimer, down to where I stopped, John F. Bolt#Formation of VMF-214. I've reviewed the changes made since the last FAC. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 21:05, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. - Dank (push to talk) 17:01, 21 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Sources and images - spotchecks not done, PD tag present

Should be The Washington Post not Washington Post
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 02:01, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Captions that aren't complete sentences shouldn't end in periods
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 02:01, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
File:John_F._Bolt_1953.jpg: source link returns 404 error, same with File:John_F._Bolt_1943.jpg
- Fixed one. Removed the other. —Ed!^(talk) 02:01, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
File:Navycross.jpg is sourced to Wikipedia. Also, who took the picture? Since it's a medal, you need copyright for the image and the object. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:15, 17 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Removed image. —Ed!^(talk) 02:01, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~Comments~~ Support

Section "Later life", statement "At the time of his death, Bolt was the last surviving American double ace." Do you have a source for that? See John S. Loisel, Air Force double ace, died January 20, 2010, about six years after Bolt.
- Corrected. —Ed!^(talk) 16:34, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~Workaholic is wikilinked in the lead and in the "Marshall Islands" section, should probably just be linked in one place.~~
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 16:34, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~No alt text for infobox photo, use the parameter "alt=".~~
- Done. —Ed!^(talk) 16:34, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~No alt text for images of ribbons, only the subsequent award stars on the ribbons.~~
- Alt text added. —Ed!^(talk) 16:34, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No dab links.
No dead external links.

~~If you are not listing any external links, you should remove the empty "External links" section.~~
- Removed. —Ed!^(talk) 16:34, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

*Note 1. Source?

- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 16:34, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good overall, I'll try and check back later. GregJackP Boomer! 17:23, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

~~Comments~~Support by Peacemaker67 (send... over) 04:07, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

given the USMC still operate jet fighter aircraft, wouldn't "remains the only USMC jet fighter ace" be a more accurate description (if that is the case of course)? Conceivably a USMC jet fighter pilot could become an ace in the future? I'm a bit surprised no USMC pilot became an ace in Vietnam. Or perhaps you mean the only USMC jet fighter ace of the Korean War?
- Reworded. And believe it or not, Bolt is actually the most recent USMC ace. Vietnam only had five US aces, two Navy and three Air Force. —Ed!^(talk) 13:05, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
is CTI a proper name? If not, the initial caps are not appropriate.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 13:05, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"training other aviation cadets" he was not a cadet, so "other" doesn't appear appropriate.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 13:05, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Where was VMF-214 based before they went to the Russells?
- Clarified. —Ed!^(talk) 13:05, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Although new to the war in the Pacific, Bolt had over 700 hours" is a bit of a surprise, as there has been no mention of him flying the F4U prior to this point. Did he do all those hours while the squadron was doing work-up or did he fly it state-side too?
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 13:05, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
suggest "Wiggins" be "Dorothy Wiggins" given she was only mentioned briefly earlier.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 13:05, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"On 11 July Bolt led another flight of four fighters in a reconnaissance mission above Sinuiju, his 37th combat mission in Korea" not sure how this works given he flew 92 close support combat missions earlier?
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 13:05, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support; as all recommended corrections have been made. Boneyard90 (talk) 15:10, 17 January 2013 (UTC) ~~Comments~~ by Boneyard90 (talk) 07:57, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

In the "Early Years", Why is there no mention of his mother?
- Added. —Ed!^(talk) 13:20, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
As above, the mention of his 700 hours' experience on the F4U is a bit of a surprise, and needs some explanation.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 13:20, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
In the Marshall Islands, the connection between "Quartermaster Kids" and the souvenirs is not obvious.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 13:20, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Vela Lavella" section: Third paragraph needs a citation.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 13:20, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Later life": "enrolled in the law school at the University of Florida Fredric G. Levin College of Law," - is redundant. Suggest: "enrolled in the Fredric G. Levin College of Law at the University of Florida"
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 13:20, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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