User talk:Houseofgirls/sandbox

You have such a strong opening line for the draft for your Sector article! I really like how you set up the paragraph to lead into talking about three main issues that have lead to Pakistan's inability to deinstitutionalize orphanages, it makes reading the draft easy to follow and understand. I think you should, however, arrange the supporting evidence that follows in a way that aligns with how you structured your main argument. For example, since you mentioned "governmental issues" as the first issue that contributes to the inability to dismantle orphanages, that should be the first point you should elaborate on. I would also like to see you insert citations to let your readers know where you got your supporting evidence from. I think your draft for the "qualitative dimension" subsection needs further context as I was a bit confused as to what surveys you were referencing to. Your opening line for your draft for "Gender Disparity" was really strong! I would like to see more elaboration on how different statuses may affect their access to education, are there differing degrees of access depending on a woman's status within society? But overall you do a really amazing job at putting forth a neutral unbiased tone!