User talk:DDenord/sandbox

Week 1: @DDenord: Looks like you are off to a great start! =) Keep it up.

Week 2: Hi Dina: I saw your comments on the Maury page, but they were not very thorough or complete. Your assignment asked you to think through the page's problems and to write out some answers to the questions posed. What is more, you did not complete the other half of your assignment for this week: copying and pasting some questions about the content gap into your sandbox page and then answering them thoroughly. Is everything okay? Alfgarciamora (talk) 20:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Alfgarciamora: Hi Dr. Garcia :) I spent the entirety of last week sick, and for some reason, I didn't see the complete thing. Won't happen again. DDenord (talk) 14:34, 31 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Week 6: 2/20-2/26

Hi Dina,

I'll be the one peer-reviewing your article as you go forward, if you don't mind me. I see you plan to start by restructuring what is already in the article. I am doing more or less the same thing for mine. I know it's a draft, but just as a reminder I would tell you to make sure you have enough information for a section before finalizing the structure, so that it doesn't look too scarce. The information that's already in Maury's article is a bit thin and you definitely can improve on it, some ideas that come to mind which you might want to consider are:

• Adding a Bibliography (I believe the French version of the article already has a small selected one you can use a guideline).
• Adding a section in which you talk specifically about his writing (style, purpose, etc.), and maybe provide some information about how his writings were received in his time, and if they had some impact in our times (you could for example find some critique of his elogies or some discussion related to that). A book which seems to have some importance in the present article seems to be his Principes de l'éloquence, so maybe you could talk about it for a while.
• Improve the lead section, which is pretty basic as it is right now. I would mention how he worked in the National Assembly and when and where he was born and died.
• Think about including an info-box. The french version of the article already has an exquisite one you can pretty much just copy and past over and would be a great improvement.
• Maybe add a section on relations and reputation. How was Maury seen among his peers of the National Assembly? How was he seen after the Revolution? The article mentions that his life was in constant danger, but I don't think they mention any instance where he was actually attacked or by whom. I think including these tidbits would be interesting. Also, don't be afraid of including some opposing opinions in there too, I mean, include people who opposed him and the rational behind why they opposed him.
• Add references to the things already in the article which are missing them, which is basically everything after the third paragraph. Make sure you keep track of your sources as you do the draft, so you don't have to go back and fill up everything again.

I'm probably just restating stuff you already thought off, but please let me know if any of these points where helpful to you in any ways,

Sincerely, ---Aocho032 (talk) 05:14, 24 February 2017 (UTC) (Armando)[reply]

Response to Peer Review

@Aocho032: Hey Armando! Thank you for taking the time to make such specific and great suggestions as to what I should be doing with my edits. I am being sure that I have more than enough information per section, but taking the time to read a document that is in Old French can be quite time consuming. :)

• Adding a Bibliography: I am definitely working on expanding this point, because it does matter and I am trying to be a thorough with my sources as possible.
• I have plans to add the section on his writing but once again, it is taking some time to sort through his writings.

All in all, I am going to implement most, if not all of your suggestions if time allows. Thank you for reviewing my article! Sincerely, DDenord (talk) 18:37, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]