User:Thrombocytopenic/Pre-existing disease in pregnancy/Julijewelz Peer Review

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General info

Whose work are you reviewing?
Singh.med/Thrombocytopenic (whichever is Satvir), specifically sections on hypercoagulability & TORCH infections
Link to draft you're reviewing
Pre-existing disease in pregnancy
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Pre-existing disease in pregnancy

Evaluate the drafted changes

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The hypercoagulability section was clear and concise. I liked how there was a definition of hypercoagulability as well as the reason it happens and mechanism behind it. I also think you did a good job of linking words to their wiki and quickly defining thrombosis to make it clear to readers. I did notice jargon used like "propensity" in the first sentence of the definition so maybe that can be reworded in a way that may be easier for different readers. I was also curious if there was a reference for the last sentence about multiple genetic disorder examples that can worsen the hypercoagulable state.

I also think the TORCH section is clear and precise. I like how there are examples given for medications indicated and not indicated for a flu infection. I think it might be helpful to readers like med students if you could format the TORCH examples in a way that correspond to the TORCH acronym which might help those that are studying for this topic. Keep up the great work!