User:Ksilver19/sandbox
Article for Course Assignment
Expanding on article: Prusten
Link to project draft page: User:Ksilver19/Prusten
Link to bibliography: User:Ksilver19/Prusten/Bibliography
Article Evaluation
Article Evaluation
This is where you will complete your article evaluation. Please use the template below to evaluate your selected article.
- Name of article: (link) Flehmen response
- Briefly describe why you have chosen this article to evaluate: This article discusses a behavioural response that was novel to me and seemed interesting. It is displayed in various animals, including tigers and horses, which are animals that I have some knowledge about and enjoy studying.
Lead evaluation
The lead does include an introductory sentence which describes the topic by introducing what the behaviour is. It goes on to mention topics covered further in the rest of the article, including the mechanism and function of the behaviour, and various taxonomic groups in which the behaviour is found. The Lead does not mention any extraneous information and remains concise, while including enough detail to introduce the reader to the topic.
Content evaluation
I found that this article clearly communicated the intended information about the behavioural response. Content was well-explained in a simplified manner that made it easy to understand. Almost all of the information was relevant and useful, however a section was included at the end of the article under the heading 'Similar responses' which may be unnecessary, as this article is discussing only the Flehmen response. Most of the content seemed to come from reasonably recent sources, so it seems to be mostly up-to-date. There was only a single sentence included in the 'Discovery' section, so it may be useful to add more information about this, such as how the response was discovered, in what animal, and if or how the descriptions of the behaviour changed from when it was initially described to the later descriptions. Some extra examples in various parts of the article may be useful to support the points being made, for example in the Inter-species communication section under the 'Function' heading, where only a single example is mentioned.
Tone and balance evaluation
The article is written is a very neutral tone, and does not seem in any way to be biased or attempting to persuade the reader. Information is presented in a straightforward manner and does not seem to be expressing any opinions.
Sources and references evaluation
This article could be improved by adding more citations. For example, in both the Lead and 'Description' sections, no citations are included. This makes it difficult to verify if the description of the behaviour is correct. Therefore it would improve the integrity of the article if more citations were used throughout to support all claims made. A good number and variety of references are included in this article, which overall seem to be reliable and unbiased. There are many reasonably current sources, however most of the scientific journal articles referenced are older. It may be beneficial to search for any recent scientific articles on this topic, and to add some newer descriptions or findings if they exist. Most of the links direct the reader to the correct page, however a few were broken or did not lead directly to the source, for example numbers 11 and 14.
Organization evaluation
I found this article to be well-written, clear, and easy to follow. Information was explained in a way that concisely communicated the important concepts in the article. Both the grammar and spelling in the article were good, and no errors were found. The article was well-organized and broken down into appropriate sections. However, I would suggest changing the title of the 'Mammals exhibiting' section to something more clear, such as 'Examples of mammals exhibiting the behaviour' or 'Examples of the behaviour in nature'. The 'Similar responses' section may not be necessary.
Images and media evaluation
This article includes a good variety of examples of animals displaying this behaviour, which aids the reader to understand the topic. It may be beneficial to add an image or diagram of the Jacobson's organ which is involved in the response to aid in comprehension of the mechanism. All images include clear captions, and seem to adhere to copyright regulations. The pictures are included in appropriate locations in the article.
Talk page evaluation
The Talk page includes some brief suggested edits or additions to the article, however there doesn't seem to be any ongoing conversations. There are a few questions regarding relevance of some information or pictures, as well as requesting sources, but they do not seem to have been answered.The article is rated as C-Class and is part of WikiProject animals. This particular topic has not been discussed in class, however wikipedia editors make valid points about what should or should not be included in the article, and show the importance of critical thinking when creating an article.
Overall evaluation
Overall, I would say this is a good article, although it can be improved. Its strengths include the clear and concise explanations of important topics, as well as good organization that makes it easy to follow. To improve the article, I would suggest the addition of more recent information from scientific studies or articles, and the addition of citations throughout the article to support all claims made. Revisions should be made to the references list to make sure all links direct the reader to the correct source. Extra examples to back up the concepts mentioned would be useful. This article is slightly underdeveloped, but with a few additions and some editing, I believe it would become very informative and complete.
Optional activity
- Choose at least 1 question relevant to the article you're evaluating and leave your evaluation on the article's Talk page. Be sure to sign your feedback
with four tildes — ~~~~
- Link to feedback: Talk:Flehmen response#Discovery
 | This is a user sandbox of Ksilver19. You can use it for testing or practicing edits. This is not the sandbox where you should draft your assigned article for a dashboard.wikiedu.org course. To find the right sandbox for your assignment, visit your Dashboard course page and follow the Sandbox Draft link for your assigned article in the My Articles section. |