User:Carolin Zion/Magnetospirillum/CalmPeach Peer Review

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General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Carolin Zion and Mannsely

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Carolin Zion/Magnetospirillum
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Magnetospirillum

Evaluate the drafted changes

Lead

I do think that the additions to the lead would be good since this is missing information, and the original isn't very informative. It is a concise lead, and it is well written since it would flow better with the original.

Content

I like the addition of the formation and morphology section since none of this information is in the original. I think these would be great contributions to the page. The habitat sentences could use some work since they are choppy, I would probably make it into one or two sentences.

Tone/Balance

A section in the shape/arrangement section could be edited because it isn't neutral with, "although some have been found to have chaotic arrangements."[1] Instead of this I would put that chaotic arrangements have been found in some species, or something along those lines for Wikipedia.

Sources/References

All of the sources are great, but I would add more citations like for the uses section, besides that I wouldn't change anything.

Table

I would fill out the table more since it is a required section. I recommend looking up biochemical characteristics of Magnetospirillum to find more information.

Organization

The organization is perfect in my opinion, so I wouldn't change it.

Overall Impressions

I had a great overall impression of the changes, but it does need a bit of work here and there. However, if you aren't looking for changes, I wouldn't have seen any of these issues besides the table being empty.

Good work! CalmPeach (talk) 21:23, 5 March 2022 (UTC)

  1. ^ Geelhoed, Jeanine S.; Kleerebezem, Robbert; Sorokin, Dimitry Y.; Stams, Alfons J. M.; Van Loosdrecht, Mark C. M. (2010-01-26). "Reduced inorganic sulfur oxidation supports autotrophic and mixotrophic growth of Magnetospirillum strain J10 and Magnetospirillum gryphiswaldense". Environmental Microbiology. 12 (4): 1031–1040. doi:10.1111/j.1462-2920.2009.02148.x. ISSN 1462-2912.