Talk:Würm (band)
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Close paraphrase
This article began as an unusably close paraphrase, and while it has come some way since then, it remains too close in places to the source. For an example of close paraphrasing, consider the following:
Drummer Lou Hinzo joined the band in 1976. The group's sound mixed elements of hard rock and what would later be known as punk. Würm played parties at their practice place and elsewhere. Their practice place was also the place where they lived, an abandoned beach bathouse they nicknamed "The Würmhole" on the Strand in Hermosa Beach.[1][2] [3]
The article says:
They were joined by drummer Lou Hinzo in 1976. The group's sound contained elements of hard rock and early punk. The band made its name playing parties and throwing bashes at their own living space/practice place, an abandoned structure they took over and dubbed "The Würmhole".
There are other passages that similarly follow too closely.
While facts are not copyrightable, creative elements of presentation - including both structure and language - are. So that it will not constitute a derivative work, this article should be further rewritten so that it does not rely so heavily for its order of information on that source. The essay Wikipedia:Close paraphrasing contains some suggestions for rewriting that may help avoid these issues. The article Wikipedia:Wikipedia Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches, while about plagiarism rather than copyright concerns, also contains some suggestions for reusing material from sources that may be helpful, beginning under "Avoiding plagiarism".
Alternatively, if the material can be verified to be public domain or permission is provided, we can use the original text with proper attribution. --Moonriddengirl (talk) 16:58, 13 September 2010 (UTC)
References
- ^ a b DUMMY
- ^ "Würm bio on discogs.com".
- ^ Carducci, Joe (2007). Enter Naomi: SST, L.A. and all that... Redoubt Press. pp. 79, 80. ISBN 978-0-9627612-3-2.