Talk:USS Utah (BB-31)/GA1
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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 21:40, 11 May 2013 (UTC)
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1. Well-written: | ||
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | All clear |
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | Criterion met |
2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | Criterion met |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | Criterion met |
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2c. it contains no original research. | Criterion met |
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
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3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | Criterion met |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | Criterion met |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | Criterion met |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | No edit wars |
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
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6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | Criterion met |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | Criterion met |
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7. Overall assessment. | Pass |
Referencing:
- Nofi citation seems to be broken.
- Fixed
- What is the purpose of Breyer and Lenihan refs?--Tomobe03 (talk) 12:02, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
- Lenihan was one of the memorial cites, now renamed to be clearer. Breyer is in the further reading section now.
Prose:
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While en route to Mexico, Utah was ordered to intercept the German-flagged steamer SS Ypiranga on 16 April, which was carrying arms to the Mexican dictator Victoriano Huerta.
, would it be better to start the sentence with "On 16 April, while en route to Mexico,..."?- How about: "While en route to Mexico on 16 April, Utah"?
- Fine as well.
- How about: "While en route to Mexico on 16 April, Utah"?
- Just to make sure, the ship in
The ship's arrival in Veracruz prompted the US to occupy the city;...
refers to Ypiranga, right?- Yes, but I see how that can be unclear. Changed to "Ypiranga's arrival"
- Would "fleet" be a more appropriate term than "warships" in
... flagship of American warships in Europe.
? I have no idea if a fleet was formally organized there though.- DANFS doesn't state whether there was a formal organization (and that might cause some confusion between that and the Atlantic Fleet), so I'd rather not go further than the source.
- Of course.
- DANFS doesn't state whether there was a formal organization (and that might cause some confusion between that and the Atlantic Fleet), so I'd rather not go further than the source.
- What happened with bodies of the 64 killed crew?
- Most appear to have been trapped in the ship when it sank, but I have found several contradictory figures for the number of men who were trapped inside, so I just left it at the total casualty numbers.
- Um, I meant to ask if their bodies were retrieved and buried elsewhere or not? The article does not say.--Tomobe03 (talk) 17:07, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
- Oh, no, much like Arizona, the ship is considered a war grave. This should now be clear in the article. Parsecboy (talk) 17:38, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
- Um, I meant to ask if their bodies were retrieved and buried elsewhere or not? The article does not say.--Tomobe03 (talk) 17:07, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
- Most appear to have been trapped in the ship when it sank, but I have found several contradictory figures for the number of men who were trapped inside, so I just left it at the total casualty numbers.
Great article. There's really little to do to clear this review.--Tomobe03 (talk) 14:18, 12 May 2013 (UTC)