Talk:Tropical Storm Delfina/GA1

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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 10:09, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• Hello! I'll be having a gander at this one. Looks like a solid article after an initial read-through, but I do have a few comments that I'll be posting below in a proper review later. Moswento ^talky 10:09, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• Thanks very much for doing the review! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Well, thank you for your prompt and enthusiastic responses! I also appreciated your Google Books result, although I appreciate it may not be appropriate for inclusion in the article. All of the boxes are now ticked, both literally and metaphorically, so I have no hesitation in promoting this to GA. Congratulations, and keep up the good work! Moswento ^talky 21:04, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Overall

Overall, the article is very good. It is well-written, with a few minor queries on the text below. It covers the main aspects of the topic well. The lead is an excellent summary, and places the cyclone in context. The sources look reliable and appropriately used, although again I have 2 very minor queries. Both the images are good. No OR, plagiarism or bias (how can you be biased about a cyclone? I suppose it's possible...) Once my queries below are addressed, I'd be happy to promote this. Moswento ^talky 10:55, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

• "Delfina killed eight people in the country" - This short sentence stood out as being a bit odd. I'm wondering if you could just combine with the previous sentence for: "although the storm destroyed about 3,600 houses and killed eight people"? [a suggestion rather than a necessity]

• Love it! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Meteorological history

• "1 minute sustained winds" / "10 minute sustained winds" - should this be "1-minute" and "10-minute" (per infobox)?

• Yea, good call. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Impact and aftermath

• "Nampula reported 281 mm (11.1 in) in a 48 hour period" - this sounds like journalistic language, the idea of a city reporting something. Perhaps rephrase to something along the lines of the rainfall being recorded in Nampula?
  • I clarified that it was a station in Nampula. That work? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
• "2,000 2,000 ha" - I assume this is unintentional double vision?
  • Ack :( --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
• "downed" - this may be a matter of WP:ENGVAR, but "downed" sounds a bit unencyclopedic to me. I won't argue the point, but something like "brought down" might be better
  • Works for me. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
• "By January 27, 12 people died" - 12 people had died?

• Good call. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• Is there any information about rebuilding work beyond the transportation infrastructure; or about the timescale for displaced people returning to their homes? This would be nice, but not essential for GA.

• Unfortunately, I couldn't find anything, since I did a very thorough search of the storm in newspapers. I also checked in Google books, and got this amusing result about "Delfina nude on on horseback". In that part of the world, there isn't always long-term aftermath. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

References

• FN15 - doesn't specify that it comes from ReliefWeb (unlike other similar references)

• Added. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• FN18 - has the text "via Lexis Nexis (subscription required)", but no hyperlink

• There is no hyperlink. Lexis Nexis is a news service. I did a thorough search for info on this storm, but that was one of the few useful news stories. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]