Talk:Tomorrowland (film)/GA1
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 18:40, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments later in the week. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 18:40, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Basic stuff and comments
The Optimist
- This section looks like it could be moved under production as a subsection after filming.
- Would a rename to Other media work? Rusted AutoParts 14:14, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
Soundtrack
- Move this section under production.
Infobox and lead
- The BBFC citation isn't working for me.
Fixed new link Chompy Ace 14:08, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- The Box Office Mojo reference should link to the film's title summary, not its domestic release.
Done, fixed using {{cite BOM}} Chompy Ace 22:03, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- Link the citation from The New York Times as either "url-access=limited" or "url-access=subscription". Additionally, I couldn't find any mentions of a genre in the archive, so I'm wondering what exactly is the purpose of the reference and if it can be replaced with something else.
Done, NYT reference removed, replaced with primary genre Chompy Ace 15:01, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- No need for references in the lead about writers/actors/release date.
- The "press kit" reference after "five countries" isn't working for me.
Done removed Chompy Ace 15:08, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- Remove the comma after "box office bomb".
- Mark all citations from The New York Times as either "url-access=limited" or "url-access=subscription".
- This reference says the marketing cost was $280 million, not $330 million.
Already done by User:Rusted AutoParts. Chompy Ace 14:01, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- "$120–140 million" → "$120–150 million" per this reference.
Already done by User:Rusted AutoParts. Chompy Ace 14:01, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
Plot and cast
- The entire plot section is 736 words, failing WP:FILMPLOT.
- Shaved to 689.
Done Rusted AutoParts 14:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
- Shaved to 689.
- In the cast section, add a reference that says Hugo was one of the "Fathers of Science Fiction" and another about the "Hugo Awards".
Done removed Chompy Ace 14:23, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- Shouldn't George Clooney be credited before Britt Robertson?
Already done by User:Rusted AutoParts. Chompy Ace 14:20, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- This wasn't changed... Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 02:24, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
Done that is based on the credits order Chompy Ace 02:37, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
- This wasn't changed... Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 02:24, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
Production
Development
- In the quote box, remove the words "Bird said."
Done, replaced with "[...]" Chompy Ace 14:25, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- Link George Clooney, Hugh Laurie, and Britt Robertson.
- Mark the reference after "developmental unit" as "url-access=limited".
- The citations after "unidentified metal object" and "many of its contents" aren't working; mark them as dead.
Filming
- Distribute the first three references about filming.
- This reference says filming began August 8.
- Mark the reference after "Valencia" as being in Spanish, and add a "trans-title=" parameter.
Music
- Move the only reference in this section to the end of the sentence it's in.
Release
- "in theaters and IMAX.[1] Tomorrowland was the first film" → "in theaters and IMAX,[1] and was the first film"
Home media
- The "behind-the-scenes featurettes" and "the Plus-Ultra animated short film" aren't mentioned in this reference.
Done removed Chompy Ace 14:10, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- Combine both paragraphs into one.
Other media
- This reference says that "The Optimist" was launched on July 3, 2013.
- A reference is needed for the claim that "The Optimist" ended on August 11, 2013.
Done added reference Chompy Ace 02:38, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
- I think it's better if this section becomes a subsection under release.
Reception
Box office
- "$115.7 million" → "$115.6 million"
- "$209.2 million" → "$209 million"
- "between $120 and $140 million" → "between $120 and $150 million"
- This reference doesn't say anything about the film costing "$330 million to produce and market". Additionally, this reference says the marketing cost was actually $280 million.
- The references after "second week)" and "701 theaters" aren't working for me. Probably just an incorrect link input in the url parameter.
- The second reference after "$30.8 million", from Box Office Mojo", isn't really needed as it's covered in the first citation.
Done removed Chompy Ace 21:51, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- The first references after "$30.8 million" and "$37.8 million in 2010" link to the same page.
Already done per consistency of film-related articles Chompy Ace 22:09, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- Distribute the four references after "Japan ($2.1 million)."
Already done per consistency of film-related articles Chompy Ace 02:01, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
- No mention of "$9.7 million on its opening day" in this reference, or "$725,000 during its early Thursday night showings" in this one.
Done removed Chompy Ace 13:59, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
Critical response
- "based on 294 reviews" → "based on 297 reviews"
- There should only be one reference to Rotten Tomatoes, not two.
- Everything else looks good.
Already done Chompy Ace 14:17, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
Accolades
- References are needed for each award ceremony/group.
Done, with verdicts Chompy Ace 22:37, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
- Accolades sections look better with reference columns, so I suggest adding one.
Other stuff
Images
- Improve the rationale of the film's poster (this non-free use rationale is recommended).
- "a background in Tomorrowland" → "a background in the film."
References
- The following websites should be italicized:
- The following publishers should not be italicized:
- Change all uses of Deadline to Deadline Hollywood.
- Change all uses of The Wrap and Thewrap.com to TheWrap.
- Change all uses of Slashfilm.com and Slashfilm to /Film.
- Try linking all websites/publishers used in citations.
- Link D23.com to D23 (Disney)
- "Twitter.com" → "Twitter"
- "Slate Magazine" → "Slate" (also change the use of "Slate Magazine" in #Critical response).
- "Businesses Insider" → "Business Insider"
- "CINEMABLEND" → "Cinemablend"
- Link de Volkskrant
- "Philly.com" → "The Philadelphia Inquirer" or "Philly.com"
- "Usatoday.com" → "USA Today"
- Link Entropy to Entropy.
- Additionally, the Entropy reference, the Teen Choice Awards reference, and the British Board of Film Classification citation should not be in ALL CAPS.
- "Variety.com" → "Variety"
External links
- Remove the Rotten Tomatoes external link per WP:ELRC.
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Notes
- @Rusted AutoParts: I have added my first set of suggestions for images, the infobox, lead, plot, and cast sections. Additionally, I will be moving into production and release later in the day. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 14:01, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
- @Rusted AutoParts: I have added most of my main notes, but I will tackle the references shortly. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 16:51, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
- @Rusted AutoParts: UPDATE: I just finished adding all of my notes. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 18:18, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
Damn, Chompy moves fast lol. @Chompy Ace: thanks for the assistance, at my rate this would’ve probably been finished a week from now. Rusted AutoParts 14:10, 23 January 2021 (UTC)