Talk:Reaction (The Spectacular Spider-Man)/GA1

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Nice job with this. I have only a few comments that I'm sure can be address quickly... — Hunter Kahn 01:10, 16 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

• You should mention in the first sentence that it's an American television series.

•  Done The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 00:06, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

• Most television episode articles I see have the broadcast date and network in the second sentence, rather than the last paragraph like here. Personally, I think it should be higher up, and find it a bit jarring to have it so low. If you're really dead-set against moving it, it's not a dealbreaker, but I think it would be better if it were in the first paragraph...

• The thing here is that removing that would make the last paragraph obscenely short. The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 00:06, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • What if the first paragraph was the first sentence and the date/network, and that's it? Then the second paragraph would be the episode summary and the director/writer, plus the bit about Jandt. Then the third graph would be about the character design, MacNicol, and the reviews? If you still don't agree, I'll drop it, but I think we should be trying to determine this by placing the most important information first, not how large or small the paragraphs will be... — Hunter Kahn 02:22, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    • Alright  Done. The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 01:39, 18 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Plot summary

• I'm guessing the Liz Allen that wikilink leads to is not the Liz Allen you are actually referring to, right?

•  Done The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 00:06, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

• "Spider-Man throws the pack in the air before rescuing Liz, before getting close enough to Dr. Octopus as he scrambles for the power pack and yanking it away from him, successfully defeating him." I feel like this could be worded better. Would you mind giving it a shot?

•  Done The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 00:06, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Production

• "The episode's title, "Catalysts," expands the series theme..." You appear to use the wrong episode title here...

•  Done The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 00:06, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

• "Coyle has noted her extreme like of the character..." I don't like the phrase "noted her extreme like". Could you reword it?

•  Done The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 00:06, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll place this on hold for now! — Hunter Kahn 01:10, 16 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! :) The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 00:06, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Nice work! That's a pass! — Hunter Kahn 02:10, 18 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]