Talk:Polish Underground State/GA1
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Reviewer: Wikicopter what i do s + c cup|former 03:11, 22 April 2011 (UTC)
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- Greetings, Proconsul Piotrus ;).
- In the lede, we get the opinions of the supporters as to what the Underground State (from now on referred to as the U.S., not to be confused with the U.S.A.) think the U.S. is, but not the opposing view.
- So, in the lede, we get the impression that the U.S. was formed at the beginning of WWII, but we (the readers) don't get whether the U.S. was killed off by the USSR or was simply dissolved by itself. The confusion is heightened as whether the people part of the U.S. were killed/eliminated by the Soviets or not.
- I'd say you are using too many abbreviations. I could hardly follow the article. I guessed at what the abbreviations meant. I will give more comments later, when time allows. Wikicopter what i do s + c cup|former 03:11, 22 April 2011 (UTC)
- I improved the lead. There is a lot of abbreviations, but I tried to ensure that on the first use, full names are given. I am not sure if using full names later would be any better. Is there a relevant MoS section? --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk 16:46, 2 May 2011 (UTC)
- Yes, there is: Wikipedia:Manual of Style (abbreviations) and Wikipedia:Manual of Style#Abbreviations. To cite the appropriate section:
“ | When introducing a new name or term in an article, use the full name or term on its first occurrence, followed by the abbreviated form in round brackets. This clears the way for later use of the abbreviation alone [emphasis added]. | ” |
— Wikipedia:Manual of Style#Abbreviations |
- —mc10 (t/c) 00:52, 17 May 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you. I did a few tweaks to the article, but overall I saw nothing that needs changing. Some institutions have no recognized abbreviations, some are commonly referred to with full name (Armia Krajowa), and after a sufficient space, particularly when a new section begins, I think it is helpful to remind the reader a full name of the organization. For the most part I do believe that the article adheres to the above rule. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk 02:20, 18 May 2011 (UTC)
- —mc10 (t/c) 00:52, 17 May 2011 (UTC)
Passed Wikicopter what i do s + c cup|former 23:21, 22 May 2011 (UTC)