Talk:Jacksepticeye/GA1
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Nominator: Shapeyness (talk · contribs) 20:07, 8 June 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Ca (talk · contribs) 23:18, 7 July 2024 (UTC)
Hi, I will being reviewing this article as part of the July GA Backlog drive. Since I am still new, an experienced reviewer will be checking this draft too.
Content
Is there an audio clip of McLoughlin pronouncing his last name? [x] is not a common phone in English, so most English speakers would anglicize it to something else. I don't have access to the cited book, but this online version of the Longman dictionary lists several pronounciation variants. I recommend adding those in a footnote.
The signature image is cited to celebs.infoseemedia.com/jacksepticeye/jacksepticeyes-signature/, which seems like an unreliable content farm. Recommend finding a better source.
Prose improvements
He is also an active philanthropist, participating in multiple fundraisers that have raised tens of millions for charitable organizations, for which he has received awards from organisations such as Save the Children and Junior Chamber International.
Very long sentence. Recommend taking out "active" and "multiple" and splitting into two sentences.
His father worked for the ESB
. Use full name of ESB for first occurance.
Spotchecks
I looked if Sean mentioned in "Death Notice of John (Johnny) Mcloughlin". RIP.ie. is the same Sean as in this article, and the details match. ✓ Pass
Is AncestryDNA really reliable? According to https://doi.org/10.1080/15295036.2020.1767796, "the scientific community has frequently criticized the reliability and validity of direct-to-consumer ancestry DNA testing". Recommend taking out He is primarily of Irish and British descent, and possibly with some Iberian heritage.