Talk:I Won't Say (I'm in Love)/GA1
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:37, 6 June 2016 (UTC)
Infobox
- You can remove the following unnecessary infobox parameters:
- "Cover"
- "Alt"
- "Caption"
- Unlink "Alan Menken" from the "Producer" parameter since you already linked him above in the "Writer" parameter
Lead
Paragraph 1
- Since Cheryl Freeman is the only other credited musician as the artist(s) of the song, I would list her first after "while singers..."
Paragraph 2
- The correct wording is "Motown", not "Mowtown"
- Done. Can't believe I made that mistake hahahaha, how embarrassing.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)
Paragraph 3
- Link "music critics" to the article "Music journalism" please
Background and context
Paragraph 1
- Remove the extra space after "literal" please
- That last sentence is way long; perhaps you could remove "featuring lyrics that Meg herself would never have sung," for the same effect?
Paragraph 2
- Again, since Cheryl Freeman is the only other credited musician as the artist(s) of the song, I would list her first after "Familiar with..."
- Add "musicians" after "Familiar with" please
- Done, but substituted "musicians" for "singers"; hope that's okay.
Paragraph 3
- American English: Change "realisation" --> "realization"
- Done.
Music and lyrics
Paragraph 2
- The link to "Parody" through "parodies" is unnecessary; please remove it
- Done, removed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)
Reception
- Link "music critics" and "film critics" here in the lead sentence please to the aforementioned articles
- Done.
- Irving Tan's review is very, very long; please trim here and there
- Done; removed "which has gotten uncomfortably crass and increasingly unsubtle over the years" and "for that swooning female friend in your life..."
- Since the list listed also acts as the title, it would be correct to capitalize the statement as "The Best Ever Disney Songs"
Cover versions
- All good! Great work
- Thanks!
External links
- Alphabetize the categories please; the only ones out of place are "Disney's Hercules" and "Love themes"
End of GA Review:
Very well-written articles with minor issues. Seven days for changes to be made ("on hold"); good luck! Thanks! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 22:15, 14 June 2016 (UTC).
- I think I've covered just about everything! Awaiting your verdict :-)--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)
- Great work. Thanks again! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 21:24, 16 June 2016 (UTC).