Talk:Don Blasingame/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 12:05, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
Shall be reviewing as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 12:05, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
General
- Hyphens should be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH
Lead
- "He made his debut for the team in September of 1955" - the date should be written as September 1955 per MOS:DATESNO
- "He made it to the World Series with the Reds his first year" - can be changed to say either during his first year or in his first year
- "he lost the second base job to Pete Rose" - how about if the word in bold is changed to role for variety?
- "he served as a minor league coordinator for the Philadelphia Phillies after that." - afterward.
Early life
- "but he went off to serve in the United States Army for a couple years during the Korean War." - please state how many years exactly that Blasingame spent in the U.S. Army
- "During his offseasons in 1953 and 1954, Blasingame attended David Lipscomb College in Nashville, Tennessee." - think this sentence should be further rewritten to pass WP:LIMITED
Minor league career
- "Next season, he went to spring training with the Buffaloes." - For the following season,
- "He suffered a couple injuries in spring training," - should that he changed to say suffered two injuries
- "the nickname would follow him the rest of his career." - him for the
- "earning a September call-up to the big league Cardinals." - try not to use the term "big league" as it is informal
St. Louis Cardinals
- "Then, June 14," - on June 14,
- "His first home run finally came May 12," - better; His first home run eventually came on May 12,
- "Another highlight came June 12 that year," - came on June 12
- "getting named to the named to the National League All-Star team for the only time in his career." - getting named to the
- "August 6, he had four hits and two RBI in an 8-7 victory over the San Francisco Giants." - how about He had four hits and two RBI in an 8–7 victory over San Francisco Giants on August 6.?
- Wikilink Sports Illustrated
- "and drove in two runs June 9 in a 12-3 victory over Milwaukee." - during a June 9 12–3 victory over Milwaukee.
- "also against Milwaukee." - over for variety
San Francisco Giants and Cincinnati Reds
- "He was only used three times in the first couple of weeks," - please state the exact number of weeks exactly
- "May 24, he had four hits," - On May 24,
- "over them in Game 1 of a doubleheader September 5." - doubleheader held on September 5.
Washington Senators and Kansas City Athletics
- "April 14, 1965, Blasingame had a two-RBI triple against Dick Radatz" - On April 14, 1965,
- "Following September call-ups," - Following a series of call-ups in September,
- I adjusted this slightly differently and linked it for explanation. In baseball, the major league rosters expand September 1, allowing teams to add prospects they think might be full-time players next year. I wanted to show that Blasingame was released just after this phenomenon. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 18:26, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
- "the Athletics released him September 7." - released him on September 7.
The only hit
- "giving up a double to Blasingame in a 1-0 Yankee win" - how about changing the word in bold to relinquishing for variety?
Playing style
- "Blasingame four times finished in the Top 10 in the NL in steals" - the text in bold can be moved to the end of this statement since it is more gramatically correct
- "(a stat that attempts to predict how many more wins a team would have because of the fielding of one of its players)" - statstic
Player and manager in Japan
- "“We ran over obstacle courses for a week - the pair of quotation marks highlighted in bold are unneeded
- "However, the trade netted Hanshin" - more formal; earned
- Hope you don't mind; I think brought might make more sense in a trade context Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 18:29, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
- "His managerial record was 180-208-28 (Japanese baseball allows for ties).[1][4][3]" - refs in numerical order please
Late career
- Wikilink old-timer's games to Old-Timers' Day
- "he moved to the Scottsdale, Arizona area." - please limit the linking to one per MOS:SEAOFBLUE
- Link Mississippi Sports Hall of Fame
Personal life
- "Kent played minor league baseball for three seasons, including a couple in the Phillies' organization." - please state where possible how many seasons exactly
- "the family split the year living there and in the United States." - divided
References
- Reference 3 is missing Associated Press as the agency that provided the story
- References 20 and 60 are missing the page numbers that the respective stories can be found on
- Reference 47 is dead and requires archiving
- The same reference is missing the date it was published and the author who wrote it
Will be putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to action/respond to the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:36, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
- @Sanfranciscogiants17: Now promoting to GA class. I have added the missing the page numbers to two of the contemporary newspaper references that did not have them mentioned in this entry before. MWright96 (talk) 19:13, 8 April 2020 (UTC)