Talk:Dances with Smurfs/GA1

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Reviewer: The Flash ^{talk} 00:00, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Yello! I saw this episode when it aired and I was cracking up the whole way through, so I was excited to see it at GAN. Check out Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my structural set up. Let's get started, The Flash ^{talk} 00:00, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

• Is there any source for its UK airdate?
  • I couldn't find one; that was there before i worked on the page. I've removed it. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• "[...]a platform for politically charges accusations against[...]" -> can you clean this up?
  • Done. Better? — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• Can you either expand the second paragraph or combine it with the third one?
  • I've expanded that second paragraph a bit, but if you think it's no good, feel free to drop that new sentence and combine the two paragraphs instead. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Plot summary

• "Cartman starts projecting his announcements into television screens classroom[...]" -> "television screens classroom"?
  • Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• Shouldn't Cartman's book be italicized?
  • Done. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• Please add a period after "Dances with Smurfs"
  • Ok. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• Can you reword the whole Avatar part? It makes it seem like James Cameron adapted the film, not the book.
  • Is this better? — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Theme

• Can you add an image of Beck?
  • You got it. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• "[...]writes on a blackboard to demonstrate to make a political point[...]" -> try and clean that up a bit
  • Is this better? — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• "[...]and that he particularly enjoys Cartman's hair[...]" -> "particularly enjoyed"
  • Ok. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Cultural references

• Delink to Avatar and James Cameron (already linked in summary)
  • Done. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• "[...]expresses anger that they stole his idea, expressing the idea that[...]" -> can you reword that so it isn't back-to-back "expresses"
  • Done. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• Delink Smurfs (same as above)
  • Ok. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• Can you merge the second and first paragraphs? It seems a little abrupt as is.
  • No problem. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

• Can you split it up into two or more paragraphs?
  • I split the ratings info and reviews info into two paragraphs. The ratings one is a bit short, but I think this is the most natural way to do it. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
• Remove the "the" before Nielsen Ratings
  • Ok. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Images

• File:Cartmanchalk.jpg has a fine FU rationale, but needs to be of lower resolution.
  • Better? — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Final say

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Excellent work!! I'm going to pass this article. Cheers, The Flash ^{talk} 01:53, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]