Talk:Cyclone Kamisy/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 20:56, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Add the $250 million damage figure to the infobox.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"A tropical disturbance formed near Diego Garcia on April 3" - Wikilink Diego Garcia
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Kamisy reached winds of 170 km/h (105 mph) before making landfall in extreme northern" - Change 170 km/h (105 mph) to 105 mph (170 km/h) so then it matches the format of other wind speeds in the article.
- No, not anymore. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"In northern Madagascar, Kamisy produced wind gusts of 250 km/h (160 mph)," - Same
- Aint gonna happen. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"upon entering the Mozambique channel," - Wikilink Mozambique Channel. Capitalize the "C".
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"After emerging into the Indian Ocean off the east coast of Madagascar," - Wouldn't it be "reemerging/re-emerging" because Kamisy was previously in the Indian Ocean?
- Not due east of Madagascar. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
In the MH section, can you give a more specific location of where Kamisy developed into a tropical cyclone?
- Sure. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I see Kamisy passed either near or over Mayotte. Why isn't this mentioned in the MH?
- Added. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"7,000 buildings were at least partially destroyed, including 1,020 schools[6] and 450 hospitals.[7]" - Move reference 6 to right before 7.
- Why? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Throughout the city, 80% of the buildings were damaged[5] and the town was 85% destroyed.[11]" - Same thing except reference 5 before 11 this time.
- Why? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"Nearby, in Befaria, a leprosarium, which housed 200 patients and their families, was damaged." - The last two commas aren't really necessary, IMO
- Disagreed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"In Antsiranana, 30,000 of the 40,000 inhabitants were homeless and were left with little food or water." - I think it should be "were left homeless", because the sentence could be seen as implying that 30,000 people were homeless before the storm.
- Good call. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:09, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Wait a second, I have a few more things:

"On April 9, the storm brushed the northern Madagascar near Mayotte" - "the northern Madagascar"?
- Fixed, it's not part of Madagascar. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:28, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
On reference #2, the authors names are "Knapp, K. R.; M. C. Kruk; D. H. Levinson; H. J. Diamond; C. J. Neumann". Change "Knapp, K. R." to "K. R. Knapp", so then it is consistent with the other names.
- I think these issues are way overrated, but okay. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:28, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
On reference #10, the authors names are "Paker, Jean W.; Good, James P." Can you change that to "Jean W. Paker; James P. Good" so then the reference will have first name, last name consistency?
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:28, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The author's name for reference #27 is "Lea, Bob". Change that to "Bob Lea" for the same reason.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:28, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Alright, I am going to pass this article and list it as a GA. Regards, --12george1 (talk) 21:37, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]