Talk:Cry (Ashnikko song)/GA1

Cry (Ashnikko song)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Cry (Ashnikko song). The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: VersaceSpace (talk · contribs) 16:07, 12 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey there! I'll be reviewing this article. To anyone who sees this I would appreciate it if you could take a look at my GA nom for Juicy (Doja Cat song) or my Did you know nomination for Hot Pink.

Lead and infobox

• first paragraph in the lead is good, but "Produced by Ebenezer and written by Ashnikko, Grimes, Ebenezer, and Faangs, it is a nu metal, pop rap, futurepop, and rap rock track dedicated to Ashnikko's ex-best friend who had sex with her ex-boyfriend" is a wordy sentence.
  • Separated into two separate sentences. benǝʇᴉɯ 08:25, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
• second paragraph is good the "generally positive critical reception" is kind of irking me though, can we change it to "generally positive reviews from critics"?
  • Changed. benǝʇᴉɯ 08:25, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
• infobox is good

Background and release

• Good, and well written at that!

Composition

• Good

Critical reception

• Good

Music video

• Good

Synopsis

• Good

Reception

• Good, although that Jezebel review really doesn't need its own paragraph.
  • Moved into first paragraph. benǝʇᴉɯ 08:25, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Accolades

• I'm kind of confused with as to why a table was chosen as the method to present this information. There is only one award.
  • Changed to prose. benǝʇᴉɯ 08:25, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Personnel

• Good

Charts

• Good

References

• Ref 14: I understand that NPR is already wikilinked in the article, but I think it should be wikilinked here too.
  •  Done benǝʇᴉɯ 08:25, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
• Ref 20: listen.tidal.com → Tidal (with wikilink)
  •  Done benǝʇᴉɯ 08:25, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

• Nice job! I'm going to put this  On hold until the current concerns are addressed.
• pinging Benmite versacespaceleave a message! 16:31, 12 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • VersaceSpace: Made all of the requested changes. I added some stuff as well from album reviews, etc., so if you could check to see if there are any changes that need to made there that would be great. benǝʇᴉɯ 08:25, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

    @Benmite: I've  Passed this article! versacespaceleave a message! 11:12, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]