Talk:Battle of the Saw/GA1
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 13:59, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
I had this page on my watchlist for some unclear reason, so I'll pick up the GAN. Hog Farm Bacon 13:59, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- Images
- Can you add a note into the map caption indicating which numbered mark represents the Saw? It's not clear, as its not at one of the named cities. Presuming that its #7.
- Good point. Sloppy of me. Added.
- Background
- Like with the Siege of Tunis article, can you add a brief mention of the name Mercenary War when the revolt transitions to open conflict
- Done.
- Campaign
- "The Carthaginians were probably organised in three divisions: one under Hamilcar, one under his senior subordinate general Hannibal, and the third a strong cavalry force commanded by Naravus" - I'm assuming Naravus is a typo for Naravas.
- Gah! Thank goodness one of us is literate. Fixed.
- Infobox
- I feel like "light" would be better than "unknown" for Carthaginian casualties in the infobox.
- True. Changed.
Not much to talk about here. Very well written article, and since the majority of it is the same as the material from the Siege of Tunis article I just reviewed, I've already caught most of the errors in the prose. Placing on hold. Hog Farm Bacon 14:41, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks Hog Farm, that was very swift of you. All done. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:01, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- Passing this one. My goal is to try to get to 250 GA reviews by the end of the year; I'm at 236 right now, so that ought to be doable. Hog Farm Bacon 17:49, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- Hog Farm, I shall try to generate some more GANs, to help you out.
That is exceptionally impressive! Gog the Mild (talk) 18:22, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- Hog Farm, I shall try to generate some more GANs, to help you out.
- Passing this one. My goal is to try to get to 250 GA reviews by the end of the year; I'm at 236 right now, so that ought to be doable. Hog Farm Bacon 17:49, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks Hog Farm, that was very swift of you. All done. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:01, 28 October 2020 (UTC)