Talk:Andy Ganteaume/GA1

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Reviewer: Sahara4u (talk · contribs) 05:49, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lede

• Any image for the lede?

• Afraid not; there are no free images from this period, and you cannot claim fair use for images of living people. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• Trinidadian former cricketer → former Trinidadian cricketer?

• This wording would suggest he was no longer a Trinidadian, so I'd prefer to leave this as it is. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• ...which left with him with highest Test batting average in history. → no need of the 1st "with"

• Removed. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• You may mention the New Zealander Rodney Redmond somewhere in the article

• Why? I don't think that is relevant to Ganteaume, and it is an article about him, not successful "one-Test wonders". Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• OK, no big deal. Zia Khan 22:40, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• Link batting

• Added a phrase to say he was a batsman, and linked it there. Sarastro1 (talk) 23:41, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

• ...as they had already had a chance to get... "had" is redundant

• Reworded. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Test match call-up

• ...England cricket team toured the West Indies.... Link both England cricket team and West Indies

• Done, although I have not linked WI in this sentence as it does not refer to the team. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• ...an injury to one of the West Indies' opening batsmen.... You may mention the player name here

• Done. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• ...but when West Indies batted.... "the" before West Indies. There may other check 'em out.

• Done. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• Link bowling and captain

• Done. Sarastro1 (talk) 23:41, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• 24-man .... 24-men?

• 24-man is accurate here. Sarastro1 (talk) 23:41, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Later career

• I think you should link the teams in each section at their first use.

• That would be overlinking. Once in the lead and once in the main body is enough for an article of this length. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• ....scored 800 runs at an average of 27.58,[6] → full-stop instead of comma

• Done. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• He passed fifty in seven innings, with a top-score of 92 against Glamorgan,[4], but Norman Preston, the editor of Wisden Cricketers' Almanack, suggested neither Ganteaume, nor any of the other three specialist opening batsmen in the team, never "came up to expectations", forcing Frank Worrell to open the batting.[7] → Too many commas, you may rephrase the sentence, also there are 2 commas after Glamorgan.

• Done. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• ...and the fourth oldest in the world.[12] → You may mention 3 other names by adding a note.

• Why? It is not about them, and rather makes the article a little trickier to update. It is not a big deal really. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• OK, this was a minor one. Zia Khan 22:40, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• A mention of Abul Hasan's average in the note would be nice. Zia Khan 05:49, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• Done. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:15, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Final review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a: b:

7. Result: Good work, promoted to GA status. Zia Khan 12:41, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

   Pass/Fail: