Talk:Mark Chesnutt/GA1
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Reviewer: Hiya111 (talk · contribs) 12:51, 29 October 2019 (UTC)
Would like to review this shortly! :)
An interesting read.. although country music isn't my forte! The article was mostly well written and simple to understand. Very few, if any, errors but some of the language could be tweaked to be more encyclopaedic. Here goes my other thoughts:
- Was there a reason for doing a structure where each album title is the section? While there's nothing wrong with it (and probably just a matter of style/taste), I thought it might be useful to readers to see some dates with the section titles (eg. 1990-93, 1994-1997).
- This was mainly because I felt I was finding enough info on each album to give its own section.
- Could the 'Biography' section be combined with the 'Musical career' section? He had a bit of an early musical career before 1990, so perhaps it should be together.
- I prefer them to be separate since "Biography" usually covers the pre-fame stuff.
- "An uncredited review from People magazine praised Chesnutt's singing" - You probably don't need to mention "An uncredited review from" here, or the fact it's uncredited.
- I feel that saying "People Magazine wrote blah blah blah" anthropomorphizes the magazine.
- "Despite showing favor toward the cover song at the time, he later expressed disdain for recording it: he told.." - Minor grammar error. Instead of a colon (:), it should be a semi-colon (;) because the two sentences can be independent from each other.
- "Contemporary critics also noted that Chesnutt's musical persona placed a greater emphasis on song quality" - Which critics say this? This statement probably needs sources.
- Clarified a bit. The sentence summarizes the points brought up in the next sentences.
- Personal life section - what does "to the former Tracie" mean? Former? There's also a typo of the word "thet".
- "The former Tracie Motley" suggests her maiden name.
- Chesnutt has won a few awards. Do you think an awards table will be useful?
- I only count two awards.
That's all for now! Hope it's useful. Lizzy (talk · contribs) 22:43, 29 October 2019 (UTC)
- @Hiya111: Think I've addressed all your issues. Ten Pound Hammer • (What did I screw up now?) 13:42, 30 October 2019 (UTC)
Thanks for the clarification @TenPoundHammer:. Only two more things found:
- In section I Don't Want to Miss a Thing, could "single potential" be changed to "potential to be a single"?
- Reference 67 goes to a YouTube page which isn't the right source.
Overall however, I think the article is/has:
- Clearly written, following the manual of style
- Broadly covered (at least enough for a GA)
- Neutral and stable with no major changes
- Appropriate use of images
- Sufficient in-line citations with reliable sources
Happy to promote this as a GA once the above has been addressed. Great work. Lizzy (talk 00:09, 31 October 2019 (UTC)
- @Hiya111: Source 67 seems to be working just fine for me. Just for clarification, it's the CMT source reading "Chesnutt releases Heard It in a Love Song"? That one seems to be working just fine for me. I made the other edit you suggested. Ten Pound Hammer • (What did I screw up now?) 00:33, 31 October 2019 (UTC)
@TenPoundHammer: Great okay, I added the archive URL to source 67 as I still couldn't open it. I also updated the release date of Heard It in a Love Song (it was 2006, not 2005). I will now pass this as a GA! Thanks. Lizzy (talk 18:39, 31 October 2019 (UTC)