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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 04:53, 18 October 2019 (UTC)
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Infobox and lead
- Target Sony Music Entertainment to Sony Music
- Move the video from links to infobox
- "is a song recorded by Belgian" → "is a song by Belgian"
- Target Sony Music Entertainment to Sony Music
- "while production was handled by" → "while the production was handled by"
- ""29" builds to a" → "the track builds to a"
- "features the singer" → "features Nottet"
- "The track's autobiographical lyrics" → "The autobiographical lyrics" as it is clear you are ref the track
- "and also approaches" → "and also approach"
- "the song's lyrical content" → "the track's lyrical content"
- Refs 1 and 2 are not needed in the lead
- You can do this though if there's not enough information to build a section. In this case, it's not worthy creating a "Reception" section, since the reviews are very shallow an there are only two peaks, so I think this should stay.
- Cartoon network freak Maybe reception shouldn't be mentioned at all since two reviews is barely any? --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:26, 20 October 2019 (UTC)
- You can do this though if there's not enough information to build a section. In this case, it's not worthy creating a "Reception" section, since the reviews are very shallow an there are only two peaks, so I think this should stay.
- "was uploaded onto" → "was uploaded to"
- "his love interest (played by Fanny Sage) reaching" → "his love interest, played by Fanny Sage, reaching"
- "Commercially, "29" charted" → "Commercially, the track charted"
- WikiLink Ultratop on Belgium
Background and composition
- Target Sony Music Entertainment to Sony Music
- "on 5 June 2019." → "on 5 June 2019 in various countries."
- ""29" starts "quiet" and" → "the song starts "quiet" and" as too much usage of the title is bad
- "parking lot."[9]" → "parking lot".[9]"
Music video
- "was uploaded onto Nottet's" → "was uploaded to Nottet's"
- "with Fanny Sage hired" → "with Fanny Sage being hired"
- "play Nottet's" → "play the role of Nottet's"
- "in the passenger seat" → "in the passenger seat of the car"
- "As they both attempt" → "As they make an attempt"
- "inside the car as in the clip's" → "inside the car as in the video's"
- "however he is alone as" → "though he is alone, since"
- "the song and called it a" → "the song, calling it a"
Charts
- Change peak position to being a sortable header
Release history
- Territory → Country
- Give ref own column
References
- Change refs 3 and 10 to citing YouTube as publisher instead of via
- Ref 5 should have iTunes Store as a publisher and cite multiple releases, as otherwise various classifys as WP:USI
- Ref 12 is dead, remove it and the supported content
Final comments and verdict
- Think you could add a reception section though there wasn't many reviews for the song, since a section has potential when they are combined with the chart positions? Anyway, good work but
On hold for now. --Kyle Peake (talk) 04:53, 18 October 2019 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass good job! --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:29, 20 October 2019 (UTC)